Tessera
Trilogy Blog
Post 163
Process – Progress as
determined by page count, word count and percent stands as follows: total pages
up to 179; total word countdown up to 96.6 K, and percent is 52.6 percent. I
continue to work several review segments simultaneously to maintain momentum.
Local Author support – went to book signing held
at Pappagallo in Fredericksburg, for author George Metzger of Spotsylvania
County, VA. George and I talked for a half hour on his writing process and our
life experiences … and the CRRL eBook controversy. His pen name is Erik
Mauritzson and his novel is Grendel’s Game.
Completed reading David Baldacci’s novel – The
Collectors.
BAM 07 September 2015 critique
comments
BAM member –
1.
First paragraph
confusing – agree, working
2.
Good advancement of story – thanks
3.
Reduce detail level about
Ready Room – agree, working
4.
Describe purpose of plans
for Pilgrim III up front – agree, working
5.
Lost on a few acronyms like
TOC, RTB – disagree, they
followed in wording
6.
Was thrown off by “mess” of
Ready Room, thought it was military mess hall
7.
Need transition from first
to second paragraph – agree, working
8.
Minor editorial suggestions
– agree
9.
“Riyals” not clear –
Arabian money
BAM member –
1.
Discussion of fireworks
came out of blue – appropriate to plot
2.
Who spoke of “CNN network”
– agree, will clarify
3.
Not clear who are good and
bad guys – Saudis are good guys; Israelis bad guys
4.
Too much hinting – disagree, my style of being
indirect (foreshadowing)
5.
Minor editorial suggestions
– agree
6.
Liked use of Admiral Anh to
warn Tooley from being in field - thanks
BAM member –
1.
Confused as to which
character was speaking - working
2.
Heavy on details of Ready
Room – agree, working
3.
First two paragraphs
confusing – agree, working
4.
Did not understand
reference to fireworks – diversions for expected attack
5.
Lessen use of clichés –
agree, working
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