BLOG POST 184

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 184

Process – Progress as determined by page count, word count and percent stands as follows: total page count went down to 210; total word count went down to to 100.6 K, and percent increased to 78.5 percent.

Finished re-reading The Last Full Measure by Jeff Shaara. It is an excellent book on the final days of the Civil War.

Have started reading Agatha Christie’s The ABC Murders.

BAM 07 March 2016 critique comments

BAM member –

1.       Minor editorial changes – agree, working

2.      Good addition, able to follow - thanks

3.      Questioned use of “sticky wicket” as British – agree, working

4.      Add a character to Egyptian/Turkish twist, perhaps have his plane surrounded – will consider

5.      Cut back on detail on cousins – disagree

6.      Liked “sonofabitch genes run in the family” – thanks

BAM member –

1.      Good continuation - thanks

2.      DNA disclosure clogs up the story – disagree

3.      Add a resolution to DNA disclosure – it’s coming

4.      Dialogue gives hierarchy – thanks

5.      Questioned restaurant scene as necessary to story – set the scene

6.      Minor editorial changes – agree, working

BAM member –

1.      Good chapter, good description of phone conversation - thanks

2.      DNA disclosure nice surprise - thanks

3.      Chinese restaurant scene well done – thanks

4.      Liked the distraction of Chinese restaurant – thanks

5.      Good follow-up from the air and missile battles, explaining damage and future strategy - thanks

BAM member –

1.      Able to follow – thanks

2.      Liked descriptions – thanks

3.      Could connect with characters in restaurant – thanks

4.      WOW! Loved how this built up and brought reader in – thanks

5.      Loved the imagery, could see the restaurant – thanks

6.      Liked the humor of holding and shooting cousin – thanks

7.      Dialogue and clarity much better – thanks

8.      Great chapter – thanks

BAM member –

1.      Liked dialogue, could visualize the restaurant setting with chopsticks – thanks

2.      Appreciated fewer acronyms

3.      Questioned what IBD meant – defined in next sentence

4.      Liked “sonofabitch genes run in the family” – thanks

5.      Spell out CJCS – disagree; defined before

BAM member –

1.      Dialogue better, clearer – thanks

2.      Clear cut, way better what’s happening - thanks

3.      Indent when speakers change – agree

BAM member –

1.      Interesting story, good geo-political description – thanks

2.      Minor editorial changes – agree, working