BLOG POST 254

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 254

BAM member –

1.       Felt like detectives were abandoning search, questions leading to M – they’re still working M

2.       Felt words of Mrs. McCarthy implied M was a person, and she either knew or was M – not true; will improve wording to leave M as either a person, or ???

3.       Thrown off by Wills saying the detectives needed to pursue WWII U-boat officer – In my brief of changes to last segment I stated that Wills, at Germanna Foundation, was told a U-boat officer had lived at Gephardt farm.

4.       Confused by choice of HT as nickname for Hortense - agree, working

5.       HT opened up very fast to LC, explain and stretch out – agree, working

6.       Color of Mister Gaul’s car seems too obvious a hint he’s involved – agree, working

7.       Correct POV shift on page 4 – agree, working

8.       Minor editorial suggestions – working

BAM member –

1.       Good overall– thanks

2.       Improve sequence of action words in sentence – agree, working

3.       Confused by choice of HT as nickname for Hortense - agree, working

4.       Suggested using LC’s PTSD as a reason for rapport with HT – agree, thanks

5.       Questioned mention of “robo-calls” – a distraction, will reconsider its use

6.       Correct POV shift on page 4 – agree, working

7.       Numerous minor editorial suggestions – working

BAM member –

1.       Confused by choice of HT as nickname for Hortense - agree, working

2.       Correct sentence about phone buzzing – agree, working

3.       HT opened up very fast to LC, explain and stretch out – agree, working

4.       Confused by ‘uncle’ – agree, working

5.       Explain why LC is dragging out questions – he’s dragging out questions in hopes Gaul will return, agree, working

6.       Correct POV shift on page 4 – agree, working

7.       So much given that I suspect HT and Gaul are important to the story, but shouldn’t emphasize that yet – working to improve

8.       Minor editorial suggestion – agree

BAM member –

1.       Confused by choice of HT as nickname for Hortense - agree, working

2.       The detectives should explain the context of M to person being questioned – disagree, they should be vague, forcing person to squirm

3.       Correct sentence about phone buzzing – agree, working

4.       Correct POV shift on page 4 – agree, working

5.       Minor editorial suggestion – agree

BAM member –

1.       Not a bad addition – thanks

2.       Said Gaul out of town 4X – Said it only twice, but will improve

3.       Add prurient details of HT’s abuse – agree, working

4.       Explain why HT and LC are attracted to each other – agree, working

5.       Commented that author used one thought three times – I didn’t

6.       Numerous editorial suggestion – agree

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I’ve been spending a lot of time on Twitter of late, trying to add caustic, humorous, or background to the continuing drama in Washington, DC. I wrote a parody pf The Element Song based on the drama of the Donald and posted it. Little reaction. All this extra activity increased my follower level briefly to forty, so I guess I’m achieving some notoriety. HUZZAH!

In my novel segment readings now, reviewers are becoming perhaps expert at detecting the sequence of clues and evidence I’m providing … and second guessing them. It feels both exhilarating and frustrating. Trying to maintain reader interest and story tension is becoming its own tense situation.

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