BLOG POST 253

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 253

BAM member –

1.       Advanced story, but interview narrative slows reader – agree, working

2.       Suggested including famer and assisting detectives names – agree, working

3.       Improve interviews with tension, clues to killer - agree, working

4.       Improve interviews, reads like documentary - agree, working

5.       Numerous minor editorial suggestions – working

BAM member –

1.       Use dialog to discuss Civil War history of Gephardt family – agree, working

2.       Identify farmer and assisting detectives by names – agree, working

3.       Reduce or summarize discussion of detective procedures – agree, working

4.       Show importance of the route Wills took to German foundation or delete – agree, working

5.       Add tension by inclusion of dramatic clues, even Neo-Nazi red herrings – agree, working

6.       Questioned whether character had already called Mrs. McCarthy – he, the lawyer, had not

7.       Minor editorial suggestions – working

BAM member –

1.       Good effort – thanks

2.       Reduce mention of recording app and business cards – agree, working

3.       Minor editorial suggestion – agree

BAM member –

1.       Good, liked story – thanks

2.       Eliminate recurring usage of same word - agree, working

3.       Numerous minor editorial suggestion – agree

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