BLOG POST 203

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 203

Process – Finished reading David Baldacci’s The Last Mile. It was a formidable thriller.  I highly recommend it. Next, I read his other Amos Decker novel, Memory Man. I recommend both, but read Memory Man first.

A fellow RWG and BAM critique, Greg Miller, also went through createspace for publication, and brought a “Proof” copy of his novel to this meeting. He is about to publish his fantasy novel  "The Grail of Culloden" a classic epic fantasy, book 1 of a series of 4 in his Westfal series.  He anticipates having it available for sale in December.  I recommend it for those interested in that genre.

BAM 07 Nov 2016 critique comments

BAM member –

Many editorial suggestions – agree, working

Overall pretty good – thanks

Questioned if George went to sleep alone – sadly (for them both) he did, for now

The language/slurring used to show drunkenness not working – agree, working to improve

The dialogue drags, shorten and consolidate - working to improve

Don’t repeat that he’s enjoying the evening – agree, working to improve

Well done transition - thanks

BAM member –

1.      Need to throw characters in a situation with less dialogue; show how they react – agree, working to improve

2.      No written comments

BAM member –

1.      Questioned use of third person POVs – thanks, working to correct/improve where appropriate

2.      Minor editorial suggestions – agree, will clarify

3.      Questioned if use of “fixture” was intentional – it was, to portray drunkenness and slurred words

BAM member –

1.       Liked how George moved; can see he’s having fun – thanks

2.      George obviously molding with the women, slowly  – thanks

3.      Liked the story - thanks

BAM member –

1.       Good dialogue, a little long in places - thanks

2.       A few typos – disagree, those were intentional attempts to portray drunkenness and slurred words

3.      No written comments