BLOG POST 197

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 197

Progress as determined by page count, word count and percent stands as follows: total page count went down to 178; total word count inched up to 98 K, and percent increased to 100.0 percent …. and That’s All Folks!!!.

Ahead lies several weeks of intensive editing, assignment of chapter numbers, and devising a cover. Then the final product needs to go to BOOKBABY for processing as a Print On Demand product.

BAM 27 June 2016 critique comments

BAM member –

1.       Minor editorial changes – agree with most; working

2.      Good way to tie up – thanks

3.      Stefano’s description of protocols too lengthy – agree, working

4.      Nicely done – thanks

5.      Reduce use of coalesced – agree, working

BAM member –

1.      Comes off as a cynical rehash of old (regional) problems with no hope of peace – does reflect the region

2.      Minor editorial comments – agree

3.      Questioned need for one paragraph on Stefano seeing despair in negotiators – will consider

4.      Too much detail in dialogue on peace protocols – agree; working

5.      Challenged use of clichés – agree, working

BAM member –

1.       Good wrap-up - thanks

2.       Liked the helo accident – thanks

3.      Stefano’s question/answer technique got old; show emotional responses – agree

4.      Minor editorial comments – agree

5.      Seemed odd the shooter and man he shot were so friendly – they’re cousins

BAM member –

1.       Writing was clear - thanks

2.       Minor editorial comments – agreed with some

3.      Use fewer acronyms – disagree; part of genre

4.      Good imagery – thanks

5.      Good ending, best writing I’ve seen you do – thanks

BAM member –

1.      Good ending – thanks

2.      Change injected to interject6ed – agree, working

3.      Liked the part where General was thrown from helo - thanks

BAM member –

1.       Really enjoyed; brought story together - thanks

2.       Good wrap-up - thanks

3.      No written comments

BAM member (new member) –

1.       Good ending - thanks

2.       Felt like Stefano was writing a memo (peace protocols) – agree; working

3.      Show, rather than tell, of Stefano’s feelings – agree, working

4.      Minor editorial comments – agreed with some

BAM member –

1.       Tickled all five senses - thanks

2.      Great, beautifully written, loved the piece  - thanks

3.      Very good imagery – thanks

4.      Great contrast to history - thanks

BAM member -

1.       Well written, easy to follow – thanks

2.      Spell out PM as Prime Minister – disagree; done in earlier segments

3.      Well done – thanks

4.      Minor editorial comments – agree

BAM member –

1.       Good wrap-up – thanks

2.      Excellent finish - thanks

3.      No written comments

BAM member –

1.       Stefano’s dialogue about peace protocols too lengthy – agree; working

2.      Liked it – thanks

3.      Show, rather than tell, reactions – agree, working

4.      Minor editorial comments – agree

5.      Break up the dialogue on peace protocols with Tooley’s reactions – agree, working