BLOG POST 196

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 196

Progress as determined by page count, word count and percent stands as follows: total page count went down to 180; total word count inched up to 97.7 K, and percent increased to  99.0 percent.

BAM 06 June 2016 critique comments

BAM member –

1.       Minor editorial changes – agree with most; working

2.      Good job staying with plot line – thanks

3.      Suggested inner dialogue contrast with stated words – agree

BAM member –

1.      Good pace, one of clearest so far - thanks

BAM member (new member) –

1.      Good pace and tension – thanks

2.      Liked the mention of guards and their support for mission - thanks

BAM member –

1.       Good chapter, build up of tension - thanks

2.       Caution on multiple points of view – agree; working

BAM member –

1.       Reads better than any before - thanks

2.       Good pace - thanks

3.      Minor editorial comments – agreed with some

4.      Use fewer acronyms – disagree; part of genre

BAM member (new member) –

1.      Kept my interest – thanks

2.      Too many abbreviations – disagree; part of genre

3.      Felt inner thoughts of characters were not needed - disagree

4.      No written comments

BAM member –     

1.      Better job of writing (than previous) – thanks

2.      State that Ellington is President – disagree; previously mentioned numerous times

3.       Liked coverage of press conference – thanks

4.      Recognized high stakes, fate of free world in balance - thanks

BAM member –

1.       Near perfect, a good chapter - thanks

2.      No written comments

BAM member –

1.       Confused by who was talking at times – working

2.      Liked the tension throughout – thanks

3.      Liked nod to reality with podium and coffee - thanks

4.      No written comments

BAM member –

1.      Many good editorial comments – agree; working

2.      Clarify who Ellington is – disagree; included previously

3.      Difference between Presidents’ body language and words – it is about war and deceit about nuclear bombs being used

4.      Clarify who Counselor is – disagree; She’s VP and identified previously