BLOG POST 171

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 171

Process –  Progress as determined by page count, word count and percent stands as follows: total page count went to 180; total word count up to 84.3 K, and percent is around 62.7 percent. I continue to work several review segments simultaneously to maintain momentum.

I have formalized another blog - It will cover a detective series set locally in Virginia. The series, Money and Mayhem, will be written by Bernard Peckingham.  

Started reading David Baldacci’s Hour Game, featuring the detective team of King and Maxwell.

BAM 26 October 2015 critique comments

BAM member –

1.      Minor editorial changes - working

2.      Suggested reducing excessive usage of “she” within paragraph – agree

3.      Questioned use of STU – disagree; Secure Telephone Unit explained earlier

4.      Questioned use of COS – disagree; Chief Of Staff used earlier

5.      This segment clearer – thanks

6.      There are several random characters coming & going – agree, working

7.      Clear up POV shifts – agree, working

BAM member –

1.      Minor editorial changes – agree

2.      Suggested different paragraph breaks – agree, working

3.      Suggested reducing use of acronyms – POTUS, VPOTUS, SECSTATE and replace with names only – will consider

4.      Suggested removing description of “tanks, artillery, and planes” – disagree; part of scene

BAM member –

1.      Minor editorial changes – agree, working

2.      Suggested changing “differences” to gulfs” in describing Shia and Sunni branches of Islam – agree

3.      Suggested reducing excessive usage of “she” within paragraph – agree

4.      Suggested reducing use of acronyms – POTUS, VPOTUS, SECSTATE and replace with names only – will consider

BAM member –

1.      Minor editorial changes – agree

2.      Suggested reducing excessive usage of “she” within paragraph – agree

3.      Questioned use of STU – disagree; Secure Telephone Unit explained earlier

4.      Clear up POV shifts – agree, working

5.      Questioned use of CAP – disagree; Combat Air Patrol explained earlier

6.      Suggested changing “decidedly” to “Uncharacteristically” in same sentence using uncharacteristic - disagree

BAM member –

1.      Minor editorial changes – working

2.      Excellent – thanks

3.      Added smiley face, LOL, and Cute to mark sections – thanks

4.      Much clearer descriptions of whom and what is going on – thanks

5.      Good touch in the “inner workings” of the “Top echelons” - thanks