BLOG POST 217

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 217

I’ve been very, very distracted by the news, trying to sort out the real, actual versus alternative, emanating from Washington. The conflict raises my anxiety for this country and our values. I’ve spent numerous hours reading and being depressed by the news. My reactions appear in another blog – please FOLLOW.

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The Process – Participated in monthly Riverside Writers Group (RWG) meeting. I read two humorous short sections during the Open Mike part of the meeting. Eventually I intend to group these together into a short humorous work with a working title of – Tales from a former Mother-in-Law.

I was somewhat shocked by a discussion which ensured after the meeting. The exchange centered around fears of impending war for America, and even worse fears for the breakdown of American institutions and values. I urge all readers to stay aware of what is happening at our nations’ capital to, by, or for the American people.

As part of RWG’s Anthology publication I entered a poem which centers on the writing process. The inspiration came in the middle of the night in the last week, and was a departure from prose. It came out as a fairly well developed piece. I read it at our Monday evening critique and it was well received.

As part of my Monday night critiques I now ensure I have a spare pen to loan, permanently, to another member.

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The working draft of The Next One now stands at 66 pages reviewed.

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BAM 20 March 2017 critique comments

BAM member –

1.      Pretty good writing - thanks

2.      Minor editorial suggestions – agree, working

3.      George’s issues with awkwardness too stiff – agree, working

4.      Expand Bai’s reaction when she wakes, seems rushed - agree, working

5.      Have Bai express relief when George re-enters bedroom – working

6.      Reduce number of sentences beginning with “and” – agree, working

BAM member –

1.      Wanted to read more about George before the proposal – working

2.      Suggested adding him buying the “rock” – working

3.      Add more reaction by Bai as George re-enters bedroom - working

BAM member –

1.      Good addition – thanks

2.      Things going too well for this couple, insert more tension – working

3.      Minor editorial suggestions – agree, working

4.      Make proposal more of a shock – working

BAM member –

1.      Arrived late, no comments