BLOG POST 205

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 205

BAM 21 Nov 2016 critique comments

BAM member –

1.      Minor editorial suggestions – agree, working

2.      POV usage improved – thanks

3.      One of better additions – thanks

4.      Reduce use of “Chica” – agree, working

5.      Shorten description of the “kiss” – agree, working

6.      Expand the break in phone conversation, show Bai’s reaction – agree, working

7.      Segment moved well, very good - thanks

BAM member –

1.      Not aware of previous sections – are the women in college – yes

2.      Dialogue realistic, liked it - thanks

BAM member –

1.      Usage of POVs has improved – thanks

2.      Take advantage of expanded POV descriptions – agree, working

3.      Reduce use of “shook her head” – agree, working

4.      Shrink description of Mamo – agree, working

BAM member –

1.       Flowed smoothly – thanks

2.      Reduce use of “he” – agree, working

3.      Conversation/dialogue modern and realistic – thanks

4.      Cool imagery – thanks

5.      Very few critiques - thanks

BAM member –

1.       Dialogue better, easier to follow - thanks

2.       No written comments

3.      Very good - thanks

BAM member –

1.      Numerous editorial comments – thanks, incorporated

I participated in two local author events recently, at local libraries. Coupled with the second of these was receipt of printed copies of Kashan Kashmeeri. I now have copies to sell person to person at the upcoming Riverside Writers Group Christmas gathering, and at any events I attend.

A full twenty four pages of the upcoming sequel to the Tessera Trilogy – The Next One, have been reviewed. Many, many more to go, but the process is in motion. The Next One is set in 2012 California, and its main characters are the next generation of characters from the trilogy novels. 

BLOG POST 204

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 204

Great News!!! Kashan Kashmeeri, the final novel of the Tessera Trilogy, is available for readers.

Kashan Kashmeeri unfolds in a region of ancient wounds, struggles within and between families, amidst the spices, scents, and intrigue of Arabia.  For readers of military- geopolitical struggles in a turbulent world, the novel thrills with the tension that is the Middle East today. 

For readers of military- geopolitical struggles in a turbulent world, the novel is filled with excitement, tension, lovers embracing, missiles and bullets, and tanks. Against the backdrop only someone who lived there can depict with such insight, it will immerse you in the tension that is the Middle East today.

Iran and Iraq seem poised for another war, and military and political changes force the region, and the world, to the brink. It is a story that had to be told, and to the last moment you’ll be on the edge of your reading space, wondering if the Middle East, and the world, will descend into war, or rise to peace.

List Price: $15.00

5.5" x 8.5" (13.97 x 21.59 cm)
Black & White on White paper
262 pages

ISBN-13: 978-1539418382 (CreateSpace-Assigned)
ISBN-10: 1539418383
BISAC: Fiction / Action & Adventure

The author is hard at work on a sequel to the trilogy. Follow the authors process and progress at www.tesseratrilogy.blogspot.com

The novel is available now through www.createspace.com, and through Amazon.com and Amazon Europe in about five business days. Print On Demand or eBook versions are available.

BLOG POST 203

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 203

Process – Finished reading David Baldacci’s The Last Mile. It was a formidable thriller.  I highly recommend it. Next, I read his other Amos Decker novel, Memory Man. I recommend both, but read Memory Man first.

A fellow RWG and BAM critique, Greg Miller, also went through createspace for publication, and brought a “Proof” copy of his novel to this meeting. He is about to publish his fantasy novel  "The Grail of Culloden" a classic epic fantasy, book 1 of a series of 4 in his Westfal series.  He anticipates having it available for sale in December.  I recommend it for those interested in that genre.

BAM 07 Nov 2016 critique comments

BAM member –

Many editorial suggestions – agree, working

Overall pretty good – thanks

Questioned if George went to sleep alone – sadly (for them both) he did, for now

The language/slurring used to show drunkenness not working – agree, working to improve

The dialogue drags, shorten and consolidate - working to improve

Don’t repeat that he’s enjoying the evening – agree, working to improve

Well done transition - thanks

BAM member –

1.      Need to throw characters in a situation with less dialogue; show how they react – agree, working to improve

2.      No written comments

BAM member –

1.      Questioned use of third person POVs – thanks, working to correct/improve where appropriate

2.      Minor editorial suggestions – agree, will clarify

3.      Questioned if use of “fixture” was intentional – it was, to portray drunkenness and slurred words

BAM member –

1.       Liked how George moved; can see he’s having fun – thanks

2.      George obviously molding with the women, slowly  – thanks

3.      Liked the story - thanks

BAM member –

1.       Good dialogue, a little long in places - thanks

2.       A few typos – disagree, those were intentional attempts to portray drunkenness and slurred words

3.      No written comments