BLOG POST 172

Tessera Trilogy Blog Post 172

Process –  Progress as determined by page count, word count and percent stands as follows: total page count went to 204; total word count up to 91.4 K, and percent went down to  56.4 percent  as additional subject matter was added in drafts. A word or two of explanation - the variation of percentage complete is due to rewrites of the segments after incorporating suggestions, editorial changes due to critique inputs. I continue to work several review segments simultaneously to maintain momentum.  Will miss the RWG meeting, as we plan to visit an elderly friend of Nancy.

The King and Maxwell series by David Baldacci illustrates numerous aspects of detective work, which may become part of my work in my Money and Mayhem series. Much earlier, months ago, I interviewed a Deputy Sherriff in my county for ideas. Additionally I downloaded copies of court transcripts from the killing of an unarmed black man, Darren Brown, by Police Officer Darren Wilson. I also queried the Spotsylvania Sheriff Department about its Cadet/Ride Along program, but never got an answer. Just completed reading Baldacci’s Hour Game.

I recently separated all the written critique comments on Sooley Base and Kashan Kashmeeri into folders in an organized, recycled file cabinet. These hold the written comments, which duplicate the electronic WORD documents and Blog entries.

Personal insight – Only one set of distantly located grandparents. This experience might account for my remoteness as a grandparent. I never got to sit in his/her lap, just chat. It may be part of why I am aloof and distant from my grand children. My parents were not openly affectionate or huggy people. Splains a lot of how I respond.

BAM 09 November 2015 critique comments

BAM member  –

1.       Minor editorial changes - working

2.       Too technical at start – agree, working

3.       Add tension between Stefano and Saudi news minders – agree; working

4.       On the Latin prayer, clarify if Stefano is saying prayer, or thinking it – agree

5.       Nice to see mention of Anh again - thanks

BAM member  –

1.       Minor editorial changes – agree

2.       Reporter interview too lengthy – working

3.       Felt that Saudi would have restricted what was said – agree, working

4.       Still unclear what intent of coalition is – thanks; am trying to be evasive

5.       What have the Israelis been doing – previously they expressed concern over AWACS, requested Patriot missile battery

BAM member  –

1.       Minor editorial changes – agree

2.       On fence about this reading; too much technical data – working

3.       Scale back technology and accentuate the characters – agree, working

BAM member  –

1.       Minor editorial changes – working

2.       Very complex story, a slow read – working

3.       Audience is too focused – agree; my choice

BAM member  –

1.       Minor editorial changes – agree, working

2.       For first time (in several readings) was able to follow – thanks

3.       Lessen rambling by Stefano of news – working

4.       Very descriptive – thanks

5.       Scale back interview – disagree; used to set wider setting of gathering forces

BAM member  –

1.       Liked car setting and demon drivers – thanks

2.       Too much technical description on page one – working

3.       Lessen description and accentuate characters – agree, working

4.       Wanted to know who bad guys, good guys are – disagree; need to keep it in suspense