Blog Post 118

Currently the very rough draft stands at 110 pages and 55K words. Based on prior experience it looks like the completed product is four months ahead of fall 2015 completion.

Critique of fourth segment of Kashan Kashmeeri

Rewrite incomplete opening sentence – agree; in process

Minor editorial suggestions – agree; in process

Change style of language used, make less direct – agree; in process

Revise to eliminate such early talk of marriage – agree; in process

Revise to have dialogue bring out feelings, vice questions – agree; in process

Have support character express her feelings and thoughts – agree; in process

Reduce use of lame language; feminize it  – agree; in process

Incorporate missing transition – agree; in process

Don’t ask multiple questions at once – disagree; in process

Revise wording of humorous expression – agree; in process

Develop and insert response to statement – agree; in process

Identify speaker –disagree; evident from flow of dialogue

Rewrite attempt at being clever – agree; in process

Minor word changes – agree; in process

Rewrite section dealing with results of kissing the Blarney Stone – agree; in process

Reword phrase ‘spinning a yarn’ – agree; in process

Snakes, probably the Eastern Garter family seen in a Facebook post last fall, are BACK!!! They’re harmless, so they stay. And the sole goldfish that was in the pond last fall … is still there, alive and well. It survived through a cold winter. It is amazing and mystifying.

Lots and lots of yard work distracts - Working to beautify the grounds, raking, composting, mowing in leaves. Trimming and picking up fallen branches. Mulching the yard with Boy Scout sold mulch, and in less prominent areas, compost mulch from our recycle center.

Am still doing family research via library version of Ancestry.com.