Tessera
Trilogy Blog
Post 243
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Completed reading Stieg Larsson’s novel,
The
Girl with the Dragon Tattoo. Excellent novel with lots of suspense,
action.
Completed a re-read of Jeff Shaara’s, The
Last Full Measure. Excellent historical novel.
Completed a re-read of Tom Clancy’s, Rainbow
Six. Excellent action novel.
A final, end of year review –
Outside reviewer –
1.
Clarify that
George has a permit to carry a weapon – agree, working
2.
Improve dialogue
to eliminate sense of tele-drama – agree, working
3.
Soften reader
sense of lover’s quarrel in clinic – disagree, adding tension
4.
Reduce use of
term terrorists – agree, working
5.
Emphasize Bai’s
reaction to George’s grumbling as her response to his not listening – agree,
working
6.
Clarify what Bai
meant by dumbee – a dolt, a pathetic but lovable person
7.
Improve dialogue
– agree, working
8.
Make Bai’s
response to proposal seem less prepared, more impromptu – agree, working
9.
Reduce Bai’s
comments about how she expects her parents to react – agree, working
10. Emphasize Bai’s wounds – agree, working
11. Rewrite metaphor at end – agree, working
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