Blog Post 105

Tessera Trilogy blog post 105

Word count now stands at 95 K and page count at 198, but these will vary as the draft moves forward. Chapters will be renumbered and resized and in a few cases are being retitled.

At most recent Riverside Writers Group (RWG), as one of numerous members sang rap songs, read poetry, acted and read short stories, the format was “Open Mike” and thus there were no written critiques. One RWG member did question the utility of including the caliber of a weapon, the weight and the velocity of its bullets. These questions will be taken into account when making final revisions.

Editorial critiques were received from a medical professional who reviewed segments from Sooley Base.

The reviewer stated the segments (written by non-medical author) were better written than expected and could only be made more vivid by extensive use of very technical medical terminology.

*** Good job of describing medical issues.

*** Liked the ending of the novel and the interplay of characters.

*** Liked the use of right and left hand comparison in describing departments and teams.

Make a correction to suggest the patient’s infection originated from a gauze left inside at a suture site, with some discoloration, and a lump – agree; in process

Correct typo errors – agree; in process

Suggested better terminology for IV ‘bubbler’ – agree; in process

Suggested better description of usage and effect of PICC line – agree; in process

Change draft to reflect that as BP increases, the heart rate decreases, unless body is in

shock – agree; in process

Questioned use of ‘genes’ in description of drop of blood – disagree, part of back story

Improve clarity and wording of stream of consciousness thoughts – agree; in process

Improve usage of medical terms to describe patient and his condition – agree; in process

Questioned use of ‘who’ as slang in dialogue – disagree, pertinent to character